Words and never-completed projects

Rosaire's post on words in abstract comics reminded me of this project I began in 2007, in collaboration with poet Jerrold Shiroma, which I never completed (this was supposed to be the first page of a 6 or 7-page adaptation of one of his poems):



From around the same time, here is a sketch of the first page of a possible treatment of Jack Kerouac's "Scripture of the Golden Eternity":



I think after doing this one page I convinced myself that I would not be able to carry this over the 60-some pages it would require and be able to keep up any kind of visual interest/visual narrative arc.

I would love to get some feedback on these, and whether you think it would be worthwhile for me to get back to and complete either piece.